Nice to see how you are able to critique yourself. Lots of writers have the problem of not being able to notice their flaws, and their writing ends up sucking because of it. I had the problem with putting in too much filler (what I call it) when I started out, working under the assumption that a book needed to be at least x amount of words.
By the way, I would like to recommend a few things some of you aspiring novelists might find interesting.
tvtropes.org (WARNING: This site is addicting) and more specifically, you might find their bad writing page somewhat usefull.
Impish Idea-- a site somehat geared towards the fantasy genre, though mostly they like to criticize poorly-written books (namely the Twilight and the Inheritance sagas). Along with their articles that critique bad books and provide writing advice, they are really fond of MST3King the books that they dislike.
How NOT to Write a Novel-- a very informative and very funny book that explains the mistakes a lot of writers make, and provides real examples from poorly-written books.